Peer Reviews

"I would suggest that the opening include more context of what is going on. I understood that someone died and someone else was a suspect, but I did not have any inclination of who the suspect was or what their motive might have been. I felt that there was some missing pieces that could have been added to fill in the blanks."

"The sound quality was bad, which made it very hard to hear what the actors were saying. This isn't really something that can be changed. A suggestion might be to voiceover what the actors were already saying-specifically during Tessa's phone call on the beach to 911. I would also try to include the title of your movie at some point during the opening, whether it's at the end, beginning, or middle-or at least some credits."

"Tessa should go up to the victim before calling about a dead body. If this video was filmed on a phone camera, putting a sock on the part where audio is picked up should help reduce wind noise."

"Honestly, this rough draft opening really needs work. It didn't meet the time requirements nor the mystery/horror theme. They need to revise their lines so it could match the story they're telling and do a couple of takes where the investigator actually looks serious instead of smiling the entire time. Add production and cast names. Work together to know who can play what role best. Overall, improve the story and acting."

"I video quality of some scenes, seems to be last minute. And video was short."

"The acting needs to be more natural or realistic, and when interrogating someone smile doesn't come as intimidating unless you are playing good cop."

"Add music to your opening in order to express shock to the initial character that sees the dead body as well as to create a harsher tone during the interview. Maybe increase the number of suspects during the film."

"The opening lacks credits, which could undoubtedly be added without detracting from the scene, and the dialogue at the very end of the scene from the main character cuts out. I would lengthen it as well, to give more substance to the circumstances presented in the opening."

"I think more time needs to be put into the actual story as well as the filming. I think the interrogation scene took up a lot of the time, even though the film was very short, and had no real benefit of being there. I also think the acting was insincere and needs to be practiced a bit more. The camera scenes were not very unique and did not capture the people or their faces a lot, and did not move into any other angles or positions. I think more time was spent it wouldn't look as rushed."

"I think you could fix this opener by starting with a scene where the dead girl on the beach is at someone’s house and maybe partying too much with a guy --then cut to the beach waves and the scene where’s she found on the beach. You don’t need the 911 call because it doesn’t sound real. You don’t need the interrogation either if you make the beginning of the partying the night before long enough to cut to the beach scene. You also need to add titles."

Most of the peer reviews were similar in what they said. The quality of the sound needs to improve and the acting as well. Most of the peer reviews were beneficial and provided constructive criticism. However one of them seemed that their suggestion was to scratch our entire video all together and they did not provide much to make it better. Moving forward, my group mate and I are going to improve the sound and the storytelling so that it flows better.